ECLIPSE ......
He found her in complete despair . Agony expressed from her face . She was looking at the eclipse , as everything turned dark.......shaded with black ! Her eyes that used to sparkle were dull and filled with longings . They told details of every single moment she had suffered ! Complete reflection of her scattered soul and moaning heart ! Her smile had faded somewhere in the tides life has put her through !
As he moved towards her he felt more weak ! He knew he'd brought this on her . He realized it then that it was not her silly little heart and just a crush as he once referred it ! Knowing the depth of her feelings he wanted to turn back time..... He wanted her back the way she used to be !
Close to her he stood and whispered her name..... He could hear the clashing of waves as she turned and looked at him with many questions in her eyes !
"I'm yours , you were right ! I'm here ...... I'm sorry .....I...... ", he did not know what to say !
Tears rolling down her cheeks , she closed her eyes , took a deep breath and just then fell in his arms ! She had waited too long for this moment ! At last ...... for once her life had given her what she wanted .... death in his arms !
i m confused to get sad or happy on the ending :S
ReplyDelete@ majworld : This means I've not written it well jub thought is not clear ! :(
ReplyDeleteWell it is a sad ending you realize your true love when it's all gone ! happens in life we come to know worth of people and things after their deaths , after they are taken away from us ! this was the main idea and regrets too was supposed to be reflected !
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ReplyDeleteI hate it when girls get hurt *sigh*
ReplyDeletei too felt that may be its happy ending :S
ReplyDeletePH. I HAVE NO WORDS.
ReplyDeleteThis is like the best thing I've ever read on your blog.
@ Sana : what ? :(
ReplyDelete@ Salman : I hate it when EVERYONE gets hurt no specification ... can't see anybodies misery !
@ ReeBz : Girl has ever been death a cause of happiness ? * death in his arms * :(
@ Existing somehow : thank you very much :)
@ ReeBz : So sorry I forgot to add this before Welcome to the blog girl :) thanks a lot for visiting and for your comment too :)
ReplyDeleteLet her to be just unconscious. Why should death be the end?
ReplyDelete@ Blasphemous : he broke her , left her to wander in deserts alone now when he needed her he returned .. but it is too late cause she's like too much broken and scattered to put herself together for him ...
ReplyDeleteph_the princess
ReplyDeleteThansk for the warm welcome, i found your blog sooo girly, so couldnt stay without giving your posts a read..
Well some sad story is going on, some sad love story i guess, a break up! m so sorry for you girL! hope u find a perfect match.. but i can understand your feelings :(
@ ReeBz : I am very thankful to you :) Keep dropping by :)
ReplyDeleteUmm... something to add here is it is not my love and not my story neither it is from my life :P it was just a thought :) nothing is happening LOL :P
thanks again ReeBz for the comments :)
Oh, got it..I got it now..nice idea..nd so true..u dun value when u hve people around u, when they go, u know their value..
ReplyDelete@ majworld : yup
ReplyDeleteLoL Lol! then i must say you have a fertile imagination! whoa! i really felt its your story cause you described it with so much heart and the selection of words is just super and classic:)
ReplyDeletesorry as i just started reading your blog, i had no idea that it is not your story =S
BTW dun be so much grateful dear, you can repay me by becoming the follower of my blog instead ;)
ReplyDelete@ ReeBz : hahaa it is just an imagination :) thanks for the praise and no sorries girl it is okie :)I'm glad you found simple words interesting :)
ReplyDeleteSo repay you say han ! :P hmm since a favor is asked sure sure :P I can not ofcourse turn down a sweet request :)
so check out the I enjoy reading these list :) See something familiar ? :) *CHEERS*
ReplyDeleteOMG!! i love it!!its soo well written,dear!!i felt as if i were reading an extract from some book!!
ReplyDeletelove it!!i have to say:ur writing skills are getting mature day by day!thumbs up :)
@ Anonymous : I am very thankful :) your appreciation and liking means to me a lot :) really ? they are ? I am working on them like so hard ! glad to hear there is an improvement :)
ReplyDeleteyeah they sure have :)
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